well, that was certainly merciless! personally I think the synth sounds could be harder sounding- especially lead melodies, and there is not enough harmonic movement- more chord changes, and dynamics needed. As a guitarist, the guitar part sounded weakest to me. J. ----- Original Message ----- From: "Steve Pering" <steve@...> To: <logic-ot@yahoogroups.com> Sent: 30 May 2002 11:52 Subject: Re: [L-OT] Feedback needed > Oh dear Gerry... You did ask us to be merciless!!! > > Let me preface my critiscm by letting you know that I am sure my stuff > suffers from the some of the same afflictions as yours. I will be posting > tracks to MP3.com very soon (within the month) so you can get your own back > then. > > Well where do I start? OK one word to sum up first "boring" > To be more precise... The track lacks light and shade, in fact it lacks any > definition at all. Every part of it is far too subtle, it sounds to me like > you lack confidence in your ideas and can't bring yourself to explore your > musical ideas strongly enough. I could go on but I don't want to appear to > be relishing this. As an artist myself I can appreciate the obvious work you > put into it. > > I hope I haven't been too harsh. > > Steve > > > On 29/5/02 9:37 am, "Gerrit "Gerry" Straub" <gerrit.straub@...> wrote: > > > If you can find some time, please listen to > > "Behind The Planets" and provide me with > > your merciless criticism. > > > > www.mp3.com/Adream > > > > No need to slate the vocals, I know > > they're bad, already taking singing > > lessons right now, but wanted some > > feedback in advance, couldn't wait... > > > > Thanks in advance > > > > Gerry > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/ > > > > > > > Sent using the Entourage X Test Drive. > > > > > > Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/ > > >